| #1 {WarTroll}[34796] |
| c738099-a.aurora1.co.home.com |
| Sorry for no pics guys, it had a misterious error when i uploaded them :( DAMN! |
| #2 Ceegen[34797] |
| 53.chicago-07.il.dial-access.att.net |
sup? nice battle report, is this your first one? it seems though that you did leave out little details, i know i might sound like im raggin' on ya, but im just trying to help =) (hahahahahaha, right...) but it would help as to spread out the details to make a nice long and interesting report, it seems like to me as a reader that you were in a rush to get it done, maybe you wanted to take more time into it but couldnt. blah blah blah, cya, that's all i can think of.
-Ceegen |
| #3 @}~MaKiTa~[34802] |
| spider-wb024.proxy.aol.com |
| My Eyes!!! Paragraphs!!!! Spacing!!!! Pleeease!!! |
| #4 probe[34817] |
| 242849hfc187.tampabay.rr.com |
| /me dies |
| #5 DarK_Temp!ar[34818] |
| 31.denver-05-10rs.co.dial-access.att.net |
So this is what your little projhect turned into eh Wartroll? Wheres the pictures? OTher than that its an ok job. Hey Ceegen! :)
Dark_Temp!ar signing off... (lol) |
#6  [34833] |
| rc33.Rmax1.globalsite.net |
That's pretty cool how you can rank players on their skill by observing them in one game... :P
Umm, you need paragraphs and of course more details. Pictures would have helped as well since 2v2s get confusing sometimes.
4
Dref |
| #7 {WarTroll}[34841] |
| c738099-a.aurora1.co.home.com |
| yah, i had pics but as soon as i uploaded them they got messed up. i dunno why. Also i made indentations w/ paragraphs, but it didnt show them when i posted it. and once again it was my 1st time :). I will improve |
| #8 Mogalin[34848] |
| cgowave-0-224.cgocable.net |
Comprehension also helps..
Well, that's not the exact word.. oooh what is it!?
oh well..
this was just nonsense
"And then [-rev] s Ghost expansions so Ghost wraith s [-rev] expansion nukes"
oh god, oh lord, have mercy |
| #9 Barage[34870] |
| dialup-209.246.188.113.Atlanta1.Level3.net |
'Comprehension' works for me. The start had a few repeditive(?) statements (yes, I know ghost is terran :P) and the end was just a jumble. I believe you were constantly editing this and tried to rush (I've done that myself and got very similar results).
Other then the 'rushed' feel, spacing can work. You had the paragraphs in there (I wouldn't have been able to read it otherwise), but put a space between them; you'll double your fan count from that alone.
As for the story, well.. it sounds like all 4 people were turtling for a good portion of the game. By the time it got good the disconnection happened and many of the readers were already losing interest. I can't blame you for it, though; only a major gimmick could've kept the story interesting for that long. The only suggestion is to look for a game that doesn't have that big a lull at the start.
Overall, I suggest not rushing the report and finding an eventful match.
Reading this report is like:
Getting into a 2 hour stalemate in BGH |
| #10 JawaAvenger[66546] |
| d7-69.hntnny.optonline.net |
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