| #1 =GvE=Fido[43232] |
| dialin151.eagle.ca |
Me 1st
hehehehehe |
| #2 Random_Doom[43235] |
| 189-161.sg.cgocable.ca |
| U need separate lines for conversations :/ |
| #3 BW-sux[43236] |
| spider-ti084.proxy.aol.com |
| Its Korhal, not Corhal. And Korhal got nuked to oblivion, was recolonized, and then infested. |
| #4 <FONT COLOR=0000FF>RS.anime(RS)</FONT>[43238] |
| sfe-nm6-182.ix.netcom.com |
<FONT COLOR=00FF00>"Told Raynor in a angry voice"</FONT>
Yeesh use correct grammer when you write fanfiction what will be veiwed be other people. |
| #5 Random_Doom[43241] |
| 189-161.sg.cgocable.ca |
Too many typos, bad text separation, story doesn't fits, etc.. etc.. etc..
<rating>1</rating> |
| #6 <font color="Blue">=GvE=FiDo[43257] |
| dialin195.eagle.ca |
| Well sorry for my grammer and spelling, i didn't have enough time to put all the " and " so boo yeah gramma and boo yeah grampa. And how do u know that KorHal was blow up by a nuke?? Answer me man, i want proof too. |
| #7 <font color="Blue">=GvE=Fido[43259] |
| dialin195.eagle.ca |
| Oh yeah, 1 more thing i'm only 11. So my speeling is pretty acurate for my age |
| #8 Bob-the-Zealot[43274] |
| spider-tl074.proxy.aol.com |
| Dugalle said Korhal was nuked by the Confederates in Brood War.(I mean, Dugalle said it in BW, but it was nuked way before that) And BTW, I am 12, and my spelling is almost perfect. No paragraphs, bad grammar, no "", which is necessary, otherwise it's hard to tell when people are speaking. |
#9  [43275] |
| 208.196.35.239 |
Far be it from me to discourage anyone from posting here but really Fido, you need to take a few more English classes before posting battle reports. This was virtually unreadable due to all the grammatical errors. Not to mention the fact that this story did not even come close to following the Starcraft storyline.
If you are only 11, then props to you, but perhaps next time you want to post something, you could have an older brother or sister, or possibly a parent read it to make sure everything is done correctly.
2
Dref |
| #10 ghoststalker[43291] |
| cc576077-a.vron1.nj.home.com |
| have you heard of quotation marks. I couldn't tell when someone was talking |
| #11 DancingMidget[43302] |
| AC8D5EBA.ipt.aol.com |
| Did you ever read the instruction book for Starcraft? In the background story of SC, it says Korhal was nuked. |
| #12 ?¿?¿?¿?¿?¿?¿?¿?¿?¿v[43307] |
| spider-ta016.proxy.aol.com |
I dunno. I T
S U X |
| #13 Sonneillon[43311] |
| prnask01d020601171.sk.sympatico.ca |
Korhal was thumped by a thousand apocalypse class nukes. "Why", you say young Fido? It was meant to put down the uprising against the confederacy, yet it only added fuel to the growing fire.
Just my two bits of SC history.
(By the way, I didn't read the silly report).
Sonneillon |
| #14 {EkT}~Unibrow[43334] |
| KRLDA010-0047.splitrock.net |
First off, I feel sorry for anyone who actually reads stories about Starcraft story lines.
Second, how come nobody gets a 1 here. This sure looks like a candidate. |
#15  [43359] |
| a1-1c041.neo.rr.com |
You'd know a 1 when you saw it Unibrow.. trust me. I've seen a lot worse stuff than this. :P Not that this is any paragon of battle reporting skill either...
Grammar is good.. sloppy grammar can be somewhat excused in a BR if you still get the point across, but in a story like this, grammar is all you have really. |
| #16 MadGod[43392] |
| moola.tcom.purdue.edu |
| What happened to your "K" key? |
| #17 =GvE=FiDo[43498] |
| dialin103.eagle.ca |
| sorry but i couldn't use quotation because all the time almost someone was talking but in my next one i will. Oh yeah "k" key is working fin just i scrfewed it up. And if anyone else wants to comment leave a sugestion for my next on and dont say "dont do another one" or anything like that. |
| #18 {EkT}~Unibrow[43770] |
| KRLDA010-0382.splitrock.net |
| Just don't do another one. |
| #19 15[103787] |
| spider-wa044.proxy.aol.com |
| halp |
| #20 25[103788] |
| spider-wa044.proxy.aol.com |
| f |
| #21 35[103789] |
| spider-wa044.proxy.aol.com |
| f |
| #22 105[103790] |
| spider-wa044.proxy.aol.com |
| g |
| #23 1005[103791] |
| spider-wa044.proxy.aol.com |
| fuk |
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