| #1 [80985] |
| a3gb7vry1694.bc.hsia.telus.net |
more fanfic....
*sigh |
| #2 Stacrafty[80986] |
| cf3k-4.paradise.net.nz |
1st.. but I'm the author
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| #3 Stacrafty[80987] |
| cf3k-4.paradise.net.nz |
| wtf, u musta done that as I was submitting.. oh well 2nd and 3rd i think |
| #4 Napoleic[80989] |
| van1d6.dial.uniserve.ca |
too many little errors. Edit before you post next time.
Looking forward to the actual battle part though. Hope you decide to have pics. |
| #5 <font color="red">Char4Life</font>[80994] |
| extfw.dcgov.org |
| eh? if his mission is to kill all of his protoss council guys because they betrayed protoss society because of allying with the terran, what does that make him for allying himself with a cerebrate? isnt that worse?? |
| #6 stacrafty[80996] |
| cf3k-4.paradise.net.nz |
yeah napoleic.. re-reading it with a fresh mind i can se a couple of grammatical mistakes and words missing.. I c waht u mean.
Char4life, well its not really his mission, basically its like hes turned evil, um.. I think I have made it quite clear hes not allying with the cerebrate.. he controls it, I have said that a couple of times.. also when I state what the cerebrate is up to, I say that its Orinn that has to make he desicions on what to do with it... Orinn took control of it.
well apart from that I hoped u guys actually thought it was ok.... |
| #7 ~SIGH~[81000] |
| cf3k-4.paradise.net.nz |
Hehe its not too bad Stac, though like what napoleic said, theres quite a few errors. :)
Just a suggestion but maybe u wanna change the font and background colour to make it easier to read... and also pictures :)
But hey its all good. |
| #8 IG_Parchandri[81008] |
| cf1.compass.net.nz |
| Darn it! Who is the cerebrate, Stac? :) |
| #9 Flam[81010] |
| netcache2-acld.auckland.clix.net.nz |
| haha these fecken word r long assssss |
| #10 Starcrafty[81016] |
| cf3k-4.paradise.net.nz |
IG maybe you if u want.. thats if orinns you..
but maybe someone like juice. |
| #11 The Cerebrate/Ar[@nE13[81030] |
| 213.166.21.132 |
....I wanna be the cerebrate too....
C'mon ... plz
by the way i liked it but you have to pay more attention to ur grammar and like sigh said chang the font and bakgrd!
i give u a 6!Keep it up! |
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