| #1 Genesis[82283] |
| ubr-26.98.113.pinecastle.cfl.rr.com |
FirsT RepLY!!
I hope you guys enjoyed it. It took me about 3 Geometry classes to write it. Geometry is so easy anyway, all i ever do is fall asleep. So i decided to do something constructive for once =)
~Genesis |
| #2 Genesis[82284] |
| ubr-26.98.113.pinecastle.cfl.rr.com |
| AH! I just noticed it got rid of the second in my little anime Smiley face V_V |
| #3 derek[82285] |
| spider-wg022.proxy.aol.com |
| hmm, this isnt bad;) |
| #4 MrPimp[82286] |
| chpxy02-chrtr02.ne.mediaone.net |
| BOOOOOOOO! No more fan fics. |
| #5 mattkid[82289] |
| 00-60-97-d5-1d-d0.bconnected.net |
his and TheVictim are the only good ones out....
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| #6 Wisest~Yoda[82290] |
| pm3-3-164.blueriver.mwt.net |
| if it wasnt fanfic i might have read it |
| #7 badtz_maru[82291] |
| barry-asy-20.rutgers.edu |
| due to my prejudism of fan ficts im goin with pimp's and yoda's words |
| #8 <font color="red">Char4Life</font>[82295] |
| extfw.dcgov.org |
| i have decided to stop reading any and all fanfics, so im sorry if this was good. |
| #9 MacBeth44[82298] |
| spider-tl051.proxy.aol.com |
| Great!! You should make a few more. Looks like Geometry is food for something!! |
| #10 MacBeth44[82300] |
| spider-tl051.proxy.aol.com |
| Good* |
| #11 phoenix[LoD][82311] |
| roc-24-95-209-16.rochester.rr.com |
Grrrrrr... getting tired of this fan-fic fad.
If you must abstain from actually br'ing and have no other creative outlet than to spend your high-school math classes writing Brood War fan-fiction stories, fine.
My advice to most of you: don't write these during your English classes. Pay attention instead.
This particular story wasn't terrible. The scenario was cliche, so was some of the imagery. Past that, decent. But please, don't "dawn" your Firebat suit.
-phoenix[LoD] |
| #12 Hype[82315] |
| 218-149-237-24.sol-dial.gci.net |
this is one of the few fanfic stories i've actually read
i think you did a good job with it.
even though an actual br is 10x better this is well written
Peace |
| #13 BUU[82323] |
| borderman.humble.k12.tx.us |
<i>"lifted into the air with a large spike like tentacle threw his body."</i>
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Doesnt that sound like a sunken colony to you? And your homonyms are evil... |
| #14 Genesis[82327] |
| proxy.ocps.k12.fl.us |
I appreciate that constructive ciritsism, i can work on my Lurk stabbage decsription. And I can only assume that Pheonix didnt know that dawn can also mean to put on. Yeah and I already passed my english 3 class last semister with straight A's thank you very much =). I hope to take creative wirting next year but thats beside the point. Point being that i want to thank the few of you who gave me some constctive(cant spell that word) Critisisim(i cant spell that word either)
~Genesis |
| #15 the()vermind[82348] |
| user-2ivea51.dialup.mindspring.com |
| alright, while i am now deeply prejudiced against fan fics right now, you're really on to something, it's just that the story line is all battles, put some peace in |
| #16 Eradicate~Me[82350] |
| spider-mtc-td052.proxy.aol.com |
| do me a favor and dont write again, that is unless ur next report is a sc/bw game, hell i'll even be satisfied with a Pokemon Gold br. PLEASE NO MORE FAN FICS |
| #17 Wafers[82361] |
| spider-tj071.proxy.aol.com |
| Pretty good but I think everyone is sick of fanfics :/ |
| #18 MatrisKing[82371] |
| caribbean-31.dialin.uakron.edu |
www.fanfics.com? er... feh
King |
| #19 ShaunX[82381] |
| spider-te052.proxy.aol.com |
| ::sigh:: Oh well, I usually read the first couple of paragraphs only, but this one was interesting |
| #20 UDontKnOwME[82391] |
| spider-we022.proxy.aol.com |
God! another fanfic! I have to give this one a 5, only because you didn't write out the Lurker as would have been expected... THEY SHOOT SPINES!!!!! You also didn't write enough. And you got a little carried away with the "TM" sign. It doesn't make the report cooler if you use a symbol. It's the writing that counts.
Have a nice day :),
UDontKnOwME |
| #21 ThieverIV[82395] |
| spider-tr043.proxy.aol.com |
I believe Phoenix was referring to your many homonyms (sp??). If you put on something you "don" it, not "dawn" it. Also, a spike goes through (not threw) someone.
Anyway, I thought the plot on this report was sadly lacking. Their is no character besides insanely frightened, and it wasn't so interesting of a story.
Here's an idea: only Monty Pylon and the other 2 or so GOOD fanfic writers write fanfics. It used to be that there were around 2 fanfics a month (or 2 series) and they were both very good. Now we are haveing a problem with too many fanfics of poor quality. If you actually have a good fanfic WAIT until all these bad ones are finished, if you just decide to write a fanfic to waste time then DON'T WRITE IT. |
| #22 ThieverIV[82396] |
| spider-tr043.proxy.aol.com |
| To clarify, I meant the people don't have characteristics except for the insanely frightened one. |
| #23 phoenix[LoD][82398] |
| roc-24-95-209-16.rochester.rr.com |
Was about to redeem myself, but Thiever beat me to it.
Yes, when a character puts a piece of clothing on, he "dons" it, not "dawns" it.
-phoenix[LoD] |
#24  [82472] |
| 208.196.35.239 |
Unfortunately, I've read too many of these marine versus zerg fan fics. There was nothing original or overtly interesting in this story. Your writing style is pretty good, but I would suggest trying to come with a more original storyline. Maybe lesbians? :P
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