| #1 UDontKnOwME[86446] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
I hope you like the fanfic! Please excuse some grammar and other errors. I think I messed a few things up :(. Sorry.
All comments welcome!
Have a nice day :),
UDKM |
| #2 UDontKnOwME[86447] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
SORRY, THE TITLE IS ACTUALLY SUPPOSED TO READ:
THE ADVENTURES OF THE HUNTER V
AGAIN, SORRY.
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| #3 Monty Pylon[86451] |
| gateway.Culinary.EDU |
| Well, well, well. Interesting plot twist you got there. I am sure, or more appropriatly, hope that this bizarre twist will be explained. I find it hard to believe that no one would recognize Raynor. Plus, I always felt Raynor had his whole Vulture loving thing going on. It is also wierd since Ghost must be born with their telepathic power. Raynor is just some redneck in space who hangs with Protoss. I am a bit confused about this twist but I look forward to the next chapter. |
| #4 y0urG0d[86453] |
| 24.66.94.142 |
Good work, interesting plot twist too, but how did Raynor become a ghost?
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| #5 UDontKnOwME[86456] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
All will be explained in the next chapter. I love keeping you guys in suspense. Monty, I have a reason for how he became a ghost. But I won't tell you. :P. I will also explain how no one would recognize Raynor too, Monty.
Have a nice day :),
UDontKnOwME |
| #6 Franklin James[86457] |
| mkc-65-28-50-248.kc.rr.com |
| Better then your other brs... |
| #7 Cearas[86460] |
| cache02-e3c.syd.optusnet.com.au |
| hi |
| #8 UDontKnOwME[86476] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
| Cearas! WAZZUP DUDE?!?!?!? Nice ta see ya. |
| #9 ThieverIV[86550] |
| spider-wd061.proxy.aol.com |
| I really didn't think that this was that well written. Things like the following quote really annoyed me: "Danny walked as fast as he could to the problem, in his Ghost uniform." Why wouldn't he just RUN? He could do that once in a while. I seem to remember something like that in the first story, where he walked out of the supply depot to get to the zerg battle. It's things like that that really screw up a story. If you desire, keep writing the story, but there is a lot of room for improvement. |
| #10 IGGY[86555] |
| 186.los-angeles-16-17rs.ca.dial-access.att.net |
| dont mind ThieverIV, he's a biased asshole with no sence of humor, and so dont take any of his comments seriously. he's also about to LYNCHED, PHUCK U TA HELL! |
| #11 SilverLeafTree[86570] |
| c519836-a.iowact1.ia.home.com |
nice, but settle down on the parts that goes sort of like
"SHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEIIIIIIIIIIIIOOOOOOOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTTTTT!"
try to find some other war for a character to express that he's pissed. |
| #12 UDontKnOwME[86575] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
Theiver, Danny was injured at that time. It was hard for him to do anything fast. If he hadn't been injured, I assure you, he would have rushed.
Maybe I should start calling Danny Raynor, because the secrets out... |
| #13 UDontKnOwME[86576] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
Oh, and Silver, I just thought that would be a good way to express the way Raynor would handle something like that. He is, after all, a redneck...
Have a nice day :),
UDontKnOwME |
#14  [86579] |
| 208.196.35.239 |
Drefsel and Drefbert give this two thumbs down... :(
Dref
P.S. I'm not gonna rate it cuz I haven't seen the rest of the series... |
| #15 MysteryMan[86599] |
| cable-76-75-237-24.anchorageak.net |
| Well, I liked it. |
| #16 Agent[86606] |
| cy529148-a.sanmon1.ca.home.com |
| It was good, tell the guys who dont like it to shove a gun up their ass and pull the trigger. Nice report. |
| #17 UDontKnOwME[89783] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
| I have to take a break from writing this series. its kinda hard right now with Monty's going on. Ill wait until he finishes and then continue... Thanks every1 |
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