| #1 Dino Din[103510] |
| dynamic-154-199.dorm.natpool.uc.edu |
| frist! |
| #2 Koh[103512] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| Yes Dino Din, you were frist... as well as first! I figured out how to make tables (thanks to Shadow D'Arc). I think this is much nicer than my first one, and there are also two chapters instead of one! I really suck at html, so I'm proud of my self for making this. If anyone wants to know why I don't just finish the story and submit it all as one... I'm thinking ten chapters. This is going to be a huge fanfic. Anyways, I hope you all enjoy this. |
| #3 stonecoldnewbie[103517] |
| 24.245.65.200 |
| i dont think anyone honestly cares |
| #4 Squad[103522] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
| wtf? good job posting 2nd chapter again. |
| #5 Koh[103525] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| Uhhh... it's chapters 2 AND 3. But chapter 2 got deleted cause Mark4 didn't want me to have my report link to a different site (remember it was the only way to have Flash). That's why I made it in html and decided to add chapter 3 for the people who already read #2. Chapter 3 starts after the picture of the Hydra. |
| #6 Erduarg[103530] |
| ts1-19.f1135.quebectel.com |
| I must say that, the third chapter disapointed me, I mean, zerg may be dumb, but hell they are pretty capable to kille two lone humant in a ship full of them. |
| #7 Koh[103533] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| Hand to hand, yes... But they had bazookas. They were also very well trained Terrans. It's no like they killed every Zerg in the ship, just the ones on their path to the ship bay. By the way, your review is just one massive sentence with loads of spelling errors... just though I'd point that out. That way everyone loses respect for your opinion. |
| #8 Katome[103541] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
| text only is thx (minus the one picture, forgiven ^-) |
| #9 Koh_Leifoh[103544] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| Katome, may I reccomend that you read over your comments before you submit them. Can you please tell me what the hell you're trying to say. |
#10  [103550] |
| 206.214.215.137 |
| Still way too short. Serious, use word count program and triple what you have here before putting up part four. I hate to see the ratings low on this cuz of length, it has a lot of potential... |
| #11 [SM]Strega~F[103554] |
| proxy4.senet.com.au |
Hmm, I didn't mind part 1 at all. Part 2 actually got me into the story. The only thing is, part 3 sucked a nut. Try not to use brackets when telling a story. It's fine if a note is being made in a report, but there are much better ways of transmitting that knowledge without using brackets. Hell, even commas would've been fine in most cases.
Part 4 and onwards better be much greater than part 3, or else you're lifetime rating will drop even further. =/
Strega |
| #12 Erduarg[103588] |
| ts1-144.f1132.quebectel.com |
| Koh , maybe I do lot of spelling error, i don't care at all, I don't even care what respect I may get about my opinion. I did really enjoyed your fanfic until chapter 3 and I do hope chapter four will be better, or at least equal to the two first chapter. And if you don't like my opinion, well, too bad but I don't care. |
| #13 Koh[103589] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| I like brackets... and I'll try to make my next submission longer. Like maybe 3 chapters. |
| #14 Nuggin[103590] |
| spider-mtc-ti014.proxy.aol.com |
| Chapter 1 and 2 were good, but chapter 3 wasen't.I know this is based on a video game and has no fact or realism at all, but don't you think other Zerg would have heard the explosion from the bazooka?I hope chapter 4 isn't like this one. |
| #15 Koh[103594] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| Damn it! Why does everyone hate Chapter 3! I had to have them escape some how! Chapter 4 will be really awsome don't worry, I already have it planned out. |
| #16 Katome[103606] |
| px2ar.ed.shawcable.net |
hehe translation:
thank you for putting it in text only; even though it has one picture I'm not going to be stupidly picky about my definitions.
^^ |
| #17 [SM]Strega~F[103607] |
| proxy4.senet.com.au |
Hmm, the main character is a Ghost, right? SO if you were stuck for ways of them escaping, use his psychic capabilities. For instance, a Zergling sees him and starts running a him. He projects an aura about him of being a Hydralisk. The ling pisses off.
Be creative, and try not to resort to Rambo-esque tactics of blow everything up, never get close to dying.
Strega |
| #18 Twip[103646] |
| dhcp065-024-133-099.columbus.rr.com |
| Let's play a game of Watch The Author Get Defensive! ;) |
| #19 Shadow D'Arc[103656] |
| spider-mtc-tb033.proxy.aol.com |
Dude, thx. 2 got me into it, but 3 was lacking. Ah well. Time to read 4.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #20 koh[134144] |
| 193.15.223.188 |
THREE WAS LACKING??!!!
HOW DARE U UNSULT MY FAN-FIC
j/k
this isn't koh, it's just some weird guy pretending to be koh. |
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