| #1 Amoeba_Boy[119854] |
| spider-wl082.proxy.aol.com |
1st
AGAIN!! |
| #2 Kane[119855] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
First non-stupid
=O! |
| #3 Amoeba_Boy[119858] |
| spider-wl082.proxy.aol.com |
I think that was uncalled for
Pretty good, youve focused on the missions mostly, but the battle scenes need to be longer. The one in the first chapter was great, this one was just disruption cannons killing lings. One thing i saw was at the end you said the executor smilied, but toss don't have mouths. |
| #4 mattzarella[119859] |
| 93.116.26.24.cfl.rr.com |
don't i remember this plot from somewhere
;[ |
| #5 Redemption6[119862] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
Yea itz from starcraft, the missions. i think you did a very good job this time, 7 prolly. This almost rivals Kane's journey fanfic. Really good. Fenix died ;(. Anyways put some html in there. Just do the exact same thing you do except do this.
<bg color = "black">
<font face = "arial" size = "3" color = "white">
insert text
</font>
</body>
or something like that....it would make it more pleasant to read. Other then that, quite nice. |
| #6 Kane[119863] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
JOURNEY IS NOT A FANFIC YOU FILTHY WHORE
ASDF
=[ |
| #7 Redemption6[119864] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| o my bad. |
| #8 Pr0be[119866] |
| 12-221-134-121.client.insightBB.com |
| What did i say in comments last report? I said "u need a probe." And what do I get???? NO PROBE. 6.876 |
| #9 Redemption6[119867] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| rofl hey the chapter has my name in it! WOOOOOOOT! 10 10 10 10 10 10 |
| #10 TheyAre[119868] |
| pa-gbg-ts-02-024-197-051-047.charterpa.net |
Do not worry my children... one more chapter of setup and basically telling the StarCraft story in my words... and then... the mega twenty-page long on MS Word battle... PvP... who can build more Goons... the Trial of Tassadar is coming... but it will be titled Civil War ^^. Homeworld is chapter three, some PvP battle, but my man Fenix returns! As a Dragoon
=(... |
| #11 titans-thesoby[119869] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| hmmm interesting |
| #12 moonsprochet[119874] |
| ip68-10-167-61.hr.hr.cox.net |
| Fuck all the god damn fictional story's |
#13  [119876] |
| St-Catherines-ppp126529.sympatico.ca |
If you don't like good fanfic, plz don't comment here. I don't see what good it does. Good fanfics have always been a part of this site.
I'll read this later. |
| #14 lebman[119888] |
| Ottawa-ppp126105.sympatico.ca |
| I liked it. Only one complaint though, when you switched locations or time, it became confusing from time to time, make the changes easier to spot in your next fanfics plz. Besides that, there isn't much I find wrong with you writting. Keep 'em comin'! |
| #15 IcE-Inforcer[119893] |
| proxy.ia3.marketscore.com |
| Wow this was good, and I havent read :P. |
| #16 Moonsprochet[119937] |
| ip68-10-167-61.hr.hr.cox.net |
| You have done something truly amazing. As seen by previous post made by me in my ignorence of fairness i hated all fan fic's equaly without discrimination. Well i read this and the fucker is awesome and got me to read others like it on these pages. Awesome story keep up the good work cant wait for the next chapter. Eventually dagomar will read this and I would just like to say u have relieved me of my ignorence and deserved all the harsh comments i have recieved in previous posts on others fic's that made me cry like a 2 year old toddler with a runny nose and diaper rash. |
| #17 Cpt._Insano[120030] |
| atpm3-4-30.enter.net |
| Omg .... the fight seens are soo cool, and he even worked in a story line :) Oh wait isnt this plagurism or something? I dont care it is still frickin awsome. Wow TheyAre... you can tell its a good fanfic when you can turn someone like Moonsprochet into a fanfic lover. 10.2 ^^ |
| #18 DunkinDonuts[120062] |
| 88.san-francisco-01-02rs.ca.dial-access.att.net |
good fanfic, only ones better ive seeen r praetors and CKs
protoss can smile? didnt know they had mouths :P
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| #19 DunkinDonuts[120063] |
| 88.san-francisco-01-02rs.ca.dial-access.att.net |
| oh, and, id give it a 15 :D |
#20  [120084] |
| 12-222-61-61.client.insightBB.com |
| I don't like this one either. To me, these are just rehashes of the Starcraft missions on the CD. |
| #21 TheyAre[120266] |
| pa-gbg-ts-03-024-197-052-174.charterpa.net |
| ASDF I do not rehash SC Missions! Part One is before the Protoss Missions, part two is mostly parts that are said to happen during the campaign but are not actually shown, and Part Three if I ever get to it is part of Protoss mission Seven but is more a look into Fenix's feelings of becoming a Dragoon... anyway I got something more original coming anyway 'bout Arcturus Mengsk... |
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