| #1 mick[121371] |
| 1Cust18.tnt8.bne1.da.uu.net |
| purple |
| #2 trint[121373] |
| dialup-83.beaufortco.com |
| purple is cool |
| #3 Amoeba_Boy[121374] |
| spider-tp041.proxy.aol.com |
this is one of the worst brs ive ever read.
1st. There was no humor at all, the only thing that kept me rading was that I knew it was gonna be short and i wanted to point out everything that was wrong
2nd. You let the pics tell the story. There was a line of text and then a large pic. Dont do that
3rd. You werent descriptive at all. Your describing a rush, and all of the sudden, one guy has a giant medarine force.
4th. Purp had crax 3 min into game???
5th. The game was on hunters. Its better than bgh, but I still hate it |
| #4 mick[121375] |
| 1Cust18.tnt8.bne1.da.uu.net |
| : } |
| #5 trint[121377] |
| dialup-83.beaufortco.com |
1. give me a break its my first br
2. there was uh a purple? |
| #6 Tsear[121378] |
| cpe-66-87-4-245.ut.sprintbbd.net |
Well, better than some of the first brs we've seen, but i agree with #3. It wasn't good, but i'd say 3-5 (being generous for first br.) |
| #7 Redemption6[121381] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
Never let pictures do the story. I'm going to be blunt because thats the best way people improve. First, your grammar sucks. I don't know where the fuck you went to english class, because it sure as hell sucked balls. First of all you shouldve used "dual" instead of duel. Combined, not convined. Your grammar and wording was ackward A LOT. Next you let pictures do the story as said above. And even so you didn't go into details, just sketchy general facts about the battle. You mightve just had made this a nt report. The game wasn't good, the toss were 2 good. Lastly, cracklings are only cracklings when they have adrenal glands, so no those were not cracklings in the beginning. And i don't get how a double hatch w/o a spawning pool could defend a 4 zealot rush.
A 3 mite be harsh, but not much more then a 5. |
| #8 User14[121383] |
| spider-ntc-tc034.proxy.aol.com |
| many big pictures + little qaulity = crap br nice try keep working |
| #9 Blarg[121387] |
| h00045a0a16d0.ne.client2.attbi.com |
«Your grammar and wording was ackward A LOT»
I think you meant awkward =)
But yeah the BR could use improvement. What's GOOD about it is that you've obviously read other BRs and have the basic format down, just work on your writing and your structure more and you'll have something up to par next time. People are saying it sucks but I see potential. =) |
| #10 andaca[121388] |
| ool-4353591e.dyn.optonline.net |
well, you have pictures at least, even if they are crap.
apart from what everyone else said was wrong, the only other mistake i noticed was the whole "lets ignore what Crimson did until he sundenly attacks out of nowhere" thing. After you mentioned him at beginning,you seemed to forget about him. |
| #11 trint[121391] |
| dialup-83.beaufortco.com |
"Your grammar and wording was ackward A LOT" that needs to be quoted :P
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| #12 zeon[121392] |
| CPE014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
only thing i can say was that it had too LITTLE text. if u wanna have visual br's, be like mick and do something funny. so this br basically sucked.
btw, <<Your grammar and wording was ackward A LOT>> NEEDS to be quoted. roofls. :)
-zeon |
| #13 :+:SlipKnoT:+:[121395] |
| 66.222.228.252 |
| Improve and the fags will shut up. |
| #14 OmegaPoint[121397] |
| id-coeurdalene1a-197.cdalid.adelphia.net |
Yeah who can stand those queers who can't keep their worthwhile criticism to thereselves...
/end sarcasm |
| #15 :+:SlipKnoT:+:[121398] |
| 66.222.228.252 |
| #14 hello? IMPROVE thats all he needs to know. |
| #16 Corpus[121402] |
| AC97E7F9.ipt.aol.com |
| For first report great, but only since you took the time to put pictures and color and such in. Work on writing and write anohter. And may Dag have mercy on your soul. |
| #17 jUsDeE[121408] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
#17
1. Purple?!
2. Your lacking clear grammar.
3. It's good that you know HTML. But don't use pictures too often.
4. Around the middle of the game, Orange's MM squad, and White's lings go up against blue's zealot and dragoon squad, of course the protoss are stronger, but you could've added a little humor like "DENIED!" with an aftermath picture, but you made the point.
5. i agree with Corpus. But Dag is a good rater, straight to the point. |
| #18 TakingOver[121410] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
| 2.5 |
| #19 IBashar[121416] |
| coyotte-e.insat.com |
I'm not pleased at all by those comments. People try to write BRs for your own entertainment (it's no spam here). Stop flamming them, give advices. You praise yourself to be good manner players, try to be good manner readers. So, my feelings about this BR :
- pink/purple is strange but why not ...
- your pics show what happened but are a too static, even if the SShots were taken at the right time.
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| #20 IBashar[121417] |
| coyotte-e.insat.com |
(f£$*ing characters limit)
- when you are more aware of the depth of Sc, you'll be able to explain what were each others' plans. That's what text is for. Telling what happened is not enough.
- Hunters lack the expo factor. When players don't try to grab/keep/deny expos, their play is dedicated to unit production and fighting. You miss all the strategic part of this (HIGHLY STRATEGIC !!) game. When you try a Non-hunter BR (because you'll try, won't you ?), you'll find out what this BR lacked. You'll feel the need to write more text and you will.
I'm confident in your capabilities. Thx for this entertaining report, even if it was a pretty short one.
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#21  [121429] |
| Ottawa-ppp3517195.sympatico.ca |
Good reports are rewarded with good comments, poor reports receive mockery. What you get is proportional to the effort you put in.
In this case, you get a 4. |
| #22 Rei[121437] |
| def-dial97.dfsi.net |
Tell it like it is ])ag
-Rei |
| #23 Redemption6[121459] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| My bad i spelled awkward wrong. Laugh it up...but fact is trint is that your grammar is a helluva lot worse then that. And youre report is complete shit. So don't go laughing at me. And yes, bad reports get flamed. People put up reports because they think "o itz so cool you know maybe ill look good by putting one up". But if you want to entertain the readers, it better be damn good to begin with. |
| #24 mattzarella[121461] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
| get better |
| #25 Duh[121462] |
| ACA39435.ipt.aol.com |
<<your grammar is a helluva lot worse then that.>>
your grammar is a hell of a lot worse THAN that.
<<And youre report is complete shit.>>
And YOUR report is complete shit.
<<But if you want to entertain the readers, it better be damn good to begin with.>>
But if you want to entertain the readers, it HAD better be damn good to begin with. |
| #26 trint[121466] |
| dialup-69.beaufortco.com |
| lol at #25 |
| #27 adrenaling[121469] |
| CPE014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| haha # 25 thats so funny... actually, no it isnt. |
| #28 Redemption6[121475] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| 25, at least show your name or something? and how does critisizing (spelling?) a report for grammar turn into a flame war? Regardless of my grammar, i was telling trint to shape up. I'm not making the battlereport, and im not the one that needs improving. |
| #29 Lieutenant[121495] |
| adsl-67-39-28-121.dsl.dytnoh.ameritech.net |
| +1 for being a bgh pubbie and knowing how to put pics in a report at the same time. |
| #30 -the o_0-[121825] |
| 24.138.58.44 |
| GW #29, well said. |
| #31 wynr[122440] |
| neptune.cohr.com |
| Redemption6, the point is that if you critique his grammer, your grammer should be correct. And when you insult people, expect to be insulted. So you do need to improve the quality of your comments, to help him improve the quality of his report. |
| #32 pop_killer[131461] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3756562.sympatico.ca |
WHATS THE FUCK??? YOU CALL THAT A REPORT?? IT,S MORE LIKE PICTURES OF A REPORT!
take your dictionnary and see what is the definition of the word "report" |
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