| #1 Decay[121448] |
| 206.10.109.47 |
| 1st! |
| #2 Zephyrus[121449] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| Alright come on now, this is better then the other two right? |
| #3 Zephyrus[121450] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| LOL nice decay! |
| #4 Decay[121451] |
| 206.10.109.47 |
| ty |
| #5 Decay[121452] |
| 206.10.109.47 |
OK, just read it. Like everyones been saying you have good potential, but this kind of story has been done too many times to be effective. And there are still some grammar mistakes. Toward instead of towered etc. Read the HTML guides on the site, write an actual battle report, and you could probably do really well. Or just come up with a more original fanfic idea. =P And yea, this one was better than the first two, but probably just because of the actual battle in it. =P
~Decay |
| #6 Zephyrus[121453] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| Ahhhhh! ty, Hmmmm i thought i was writing out of cliche. i was sort of heading towards the direction of how he becomes chosen and goes through ghost training. If thats been done already then i think i will give up =P. But you know how it is. You want to finish a work. so if the ghost thing has been done already, then i will end it and start some true brs. (eeks!!! that means ill have to go online after work!!!!) =P |
#7  [121454] |
| StCatherines-ppp109155.sympatico.ca |
suggestion: instead of posting a new br every few hours, plz post the seperate chapters in one big bundle and submit it, thereby likely having a better rating.
Hm, some of your imagery was very good. But there were also some serious problems:
"From scouting reports, it seems that this was going to be one long and doomed battle."
"This was going to be one long day, if he lives that is."
Also, this still bears signs of cliche. 5. |
| #8 Zephyrus[121455] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| =) Thanks! hehehe working my way up there. PS for all of you who wonders how I post every few hours, my job is utterly boring! |
| #9 Orcaroni and Cheeze[121456] |
| 67.40.104.199 |
| Make a real BR please, FF= no thx |
| #10 mattzarella[121464] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
don't ask for battlereports and not want fanfics, because people won't stop
besides half of this site is fanfics |
| #11 um[121467] |
| pcp01174440pcs.roylok01.mi.comcast.net |
| wtf is new taipei |
| #12 Orcaroni and Cheeze[121470] |
| 67.40.104.199 |
| Good point I suppose, can' live with them, can't live without them, maybe a War 3 FF, at least I'd have something original to waste my time on. |
| #13 IBashar[121552] |
| coyotte-e.insat.com |
K, my own feeling : part 2 was better. Part 1 lacked background. Part 3 lacks explainations. Fighting but no real story. If you submit more, I'll read it (it's the only ffic I actually read. Not that yours is the best ever but I've made some effort to read the beginning thus I'm going to read the whole thing)
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| #14 jUsDeE[121602] |
| spider-ntc-tb084.proxy.aol.com |
| gettin up there eh? gw |
| #15 Zephyrus[121603] |
| 149.168.54.188 |
| =P Thanks guys, but for the time I started working on a WC3 ff, dont know how it will go, i will still keep up with this one! |
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