| #1 zealot[121664] |
| webmaster133.taino.net |
| Nice ver nice. I like it |
| #2 Epoch[121665] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
| I hate case sensitivity. Pics work now ^_^ |
| #3 Corpus[121667] |
| 12-216-217-0.client.mchsi.com |
| Ha great Pics..now i'll read it. |
| #4 zeon[121668] |
| CPE014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
omfg, the text is HUGE man. did u want the br to look longer or something? well, u sure didnt fool me.
:( |
| #5 Epoch[121669] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
4:
Well, I could make it smaller, but the font just doesn't LOOK good at the next lowest size. Gradual font sizes are not HTML's strong points.
If another person complains, I'll change it. |
#6  [121672] |
| crtntx1-ar7-4-63-073-022.crtntx1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Text too big... so I didn't bother to read it -_-. Sorry |
| #7 Decay[121673] |
| 206.10.109.68 |
Whine, whine, complain. Change it NOW!!!! Lol jk its fine!.!
I liked it. Please keep writing it.
|
| #8 Epoch[121675] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
Count of people who want continue: 1
Weee!
Ok, I'll change the font to small. But it really sucks like that, IMO |
| #9 zeon[121676] |
| CPE014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| exactly what font r u using? arial? |
| #10 Epoch[121677] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
9:
Font = Poor Richard
It looked sort of 'Medieval', which seemed appropriate for this. I might change it to Garamond.
There's always the chance none of you can see the font, though ^_^ |
| #11 Redemption6[121680] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| Pretty decent, i didn't find any huge grammar errors, and the storyline wasn't bad of course. I thought it to be quite interesting, tho hard to follow sometimes. |
| #12 Arsenic[121681] |
| sdn-ap-009caburbP0107.dialsprint.net |
| the font was incredibly annoying and made my eyes hurt =[ |
| #13 Epoch[121683] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
12:
Sorry, it's easier to read when it's bigger, but SOME PEOPLE just had to demand that it be smaller.
T.T |
| #14 FearlessGuy[121688] |
| ts1-c1-064.toronto.auracom.net |
to all u pussys that say ITS TO BIG just change ur browser font size fu
hey epoch ill be on w3 soon
Fear~ |
| #15 Epoch[121690] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
14:
Thanks, Fear.
However, some newbs, er people might not know how to do that ^_^
Newbs with mouse wheels:
Hold control and scroll the mouse wheel
Newbs without mouse wheels:
View -> Text Size -> *Whatever* |
#16  [121697] |
| Ottawa-ppp3517179.sympatico.ca |
IranianMidget: I've already spotted a gaping grammar error
Dagomarius: but all these new brs make me think MontyPylon bred with Epoch, had 10 identical children, and unleashed them upon br.com
IranianMidget: I know
IranianMidget: but this really isnt that bad of a story
IranianMidget: but
IranianMidget: the alt-text really destroys the mood :/
IranianMidget: its like
IranianMidget: "and those who werent as lucky were bathed in the moon-wells, some would make it, some would not"
IranianMidget: then
Dagomarius: can I copy that onto my comment?
IranianMidget: "i actually had a tough time fixing this picture right"
Dagomarius: lolz. So what do you think it should get?
IranianMidget: hmm...
IranianMidget: 6-7 i suppose
Me talking to keanu ;). |
| #17 [121698] |
| Ottawa-ppp3517179.sympatico.ca |
| btw, work on character development, and yes, text size/font was no thx |
| #18 Keanu_Reaver[121699] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-176.sea.eschelon.com |
lol, funny guy :D
anyway as i said on aim, charactor development needs work (i really dont feel anything for these charactors...) as well as more proofreading...
the pics were a big bright spot but i would leave the alt-text out as it does destroy mood :( anyway gj! i think its pretty good and definately deserves more parts :D |
| #19 Rei[121730] |
| def-dial236.dfsi.net |
I give it a 5.. Pros/cons have already been said.
Don't give up, and just keep trying harder.
... : ]
-Rei |
| #20 Epoch[121765] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
Hehe, sorry about the alt-text ^_^
No more next time.
And this was pretty much character intro, I'll work on development next time, I hope.
I haven't written anything in a long time.
Oh and:
Dagomarius: but all these new brs make me think MontyPylon bred with Epoch, had 10 identical children, and unleashed them upon br.com
I resent that, yet somehow find it funny O.o
Removing alt-text now, changing font. I won't leave a bad piece of work. |
| #21 [121779] |
| St-Catherines-ppp112470.sympatico.ca |
| Epoch, wasn't talking about yours, but the sting of spam, bronze and silver before it ;) |
| #22 Epoch[121791] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
| Hehe, mine didn't even get that O.o Part 2 is on the way... |
| #23 Epoch[121792] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
Wait, IT GOT SILVER!
I forgot what ratings got Gold/Silver/Bronze, sorry ^_^ |
| #24 ZerG~LinG[121797] |
| p456-42.ppp.get2net.dk |
1-3 bronze i think, 4-6 silva
Anyway mediocre fanfic O_o
im tired |
| #25 Epoch[121805] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
| Well, mediocre is better than sucky. |
| #26 Link of SHadow[121931] |
| cache-mtc-am07.proxy.aol.com |
i noticed this.... o.o;;
His vision was blurry, but he could still make out the demon charging at him
wasn't he supposed to be blind? |
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