| #1 Black_Abyss[121884] |
| 04-114.057.popsite.net |
| 1st |
| #2 c4t[121885] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
2nd
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| #3 c4t[121886] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| 3rd |
| #4 c4t[121887] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| 4th |
| #5 c4t[121888] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| 5th |
| #6 c4t[121889] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
HAH took 2-5, anything past that gets no respect, so NAH :P
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| #7 Painbringer[121891] |
| net.ino.no |
| hehe c4t, anyway quite good story although I felt some of the pictures was missing some background. But I guess that would mean a lot of work and such. |
| #8 Epoch[121892] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
c4t:
U bm spammer.
7:
I'd put in a background, if the world editor had one |
| #9 hi[121893] |
| ool-18b8ee8c.dyn.optonline.net |
| A very good report I think it is worth at least a 7 |
| #10 c4t[121895] |
| h002078d395d4.ne.client2.attbi.com |
epoch:
u damn right |
| #11 Redemption6[121896] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| ROFL youre pictures are so fuckin funny. Like the first one with the 3 archers and priestess, you copy pasted the target in and you could see it :D:D:D i dunno, something about those pictures just made me crack up. And then you say like "thousands of undead appeared over the hill" but you show about 20, and like 30 night elfs running. lol. Anyways really nice report, i found it interesting though lacking in detail at some times. I think you should've extended each of the 3 events that the three priestesses in training did, and that would make it better. other then that, i enjoy a fanfic w/pics, and i think this could be an 8. |
| #12 Epoch[121897] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
11:
The target is actually there. There were two others I had to edit out because of story incontinuity, but that one is actually there.
That picture isn't supposed to show the entire Night Elf and Undead army, just a fraction of them. And there's more Undead on the other side of the hill, that's just the front of the wave. The Night Elves weren't running yet. And thanks for the nice comment, although I thought I wrote detailedly... =/
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| #13 Decay[121904] |
| 206.10.109.39 |
I liked it. Better than the last one, anyways. Keep it up!
Kudos!
~Decay |
| #14 whiteboy[121905] |
| 208-58-192-48.s48.tnt1.abrd.md.dialup.rcn.com |
THATS IT.
I warned you.
Prepare for Orcish Romeo and Juliet. |
| #15 Epoch[121907] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
13:
Ah, thanks Decay ^^
14:
Woohoo! I've been hoping you'd write that ^^
Just make Juliet the Orc, it'll be more fun that way ^^ |
| #16 titans-thesoby[121912] |
| d-207-5-252-246.s-way.com |
| marginal, with room for improvment. |
| #17 Epoch[121916] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
16:
I know, I wrote alot of it when I was tired. I'll work harded on Part3, which is going to be even better, with any luck. More focused on the characters, the big plot will unfold, less focused on the war with the Scourge... |
| #18 Corpus[121923] |
| AC8AC7C6.ipt.aol.com |
| Heh I nice pics. Good story. write on! |
| #19 EldritchEvil[121930] |
| nr11-216-196-184-147.fuse.net |
| Nice. I like the pics, adds flavor. |
| #20 Kane[121939] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
ahhaha those are some of the worst pics ive ever seen
ahhahah how can you put that crap in a report
hahahhahaaa |
| #21 Epoch[121948] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
19:
Thanks
20:
Yeah, the pics really did suck, esp. the one with the target...
The two battle ones really weren't that bad, were they? |
| #22 :+:SlipKnoT:+:[121978] |
| atiy44hsy452e.ab.hsia.telus.net |
| Horrid pics |
| #23 Arsenic[121997] |
| sdn-ap-014caburbP0158.dialsprint.net |
| some of the worst pics i have ever seen |
| #24 Redemption6[122009] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
| Hand-draw your pics like dag :D They look cool, just don't fuck up the faces ;) haha jk. |
| #25 pyroguy562[122054] |
| mentat.ihc.com |
I really liked your story, but felt that it needed a little more character development. Lengthening each "segment" might help with this. I didn't have enough time to really get into each character before you switched between the two plot paths. Despite these minor complaints, I really enjoyed your story. Keep up the good work!
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| #26 Kane[122073] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
Okay, some things:
1) Don't put pictures in a piece of fiction. Espically if they suck and you know it. The power of the written word is its ability to speak directly to the imagination. Let the reader form his own pictures. Also, those pictures *sucked.*
2) Watch for spelling and grammar.
3) Be creative. Your plot is one of the most cliché, archetypal things ive seen on this site. The archery contest thingy was something most people have seen a million times before.
Your style is good, but your sense of story is lacking. |
| #27 Cataclysmic[122113] |
| wiley-41-69624.roadrunner.nf.net |
| I liked it, keep it up :) |
| #28 Epoch[122195] |
| ool-182f0edb.dyn.optonline.net |
26:
I kinda stumbled through this one. Part 3 is coming up really soon, and the pics will be better... I just kinda felt obliged to put them in, I like pics. They draw peoples' attentions. |
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