#1  [155329] |
| ip68-230-2-63.ph.ph.cox.net |
sorry it took so long to get this one out! had some uhh...'comp problems'. anyway, they'll be back on schedule next sunday, so enjoy!
oh and sorry about making this an 'sc' br, still getting used to the new html authoring tool. |
| #2 striz[155330] |
| CPE000f66dce08e-CM013050003852.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| 2nd. I liked it. |
| #3 badme[155332] |
| pcp05313686pcs.norstn01.pa.comcast.net |
| 3rd, now to read |
| #4 Dibbler[155333] |
| 213-84-180-234.adsl.xs4all.nl |
5th, read next
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| #5 Dibbler[155334] |
| 213-84-180-234.adsl.xs4all.nl |
| See? |
| #6 Dibbler[155335] |
| 213-84-180-234.adsl.xs4all.nl |
| Once again an excellent storym, with well-developed characters. Only sometimes you mix past and present tense: "As is the norm for their hunts, Timeo only snagged the few blades " for instance doesn't sound right to me. |
| #7 Mark4[155338] |
| c-67-180-207-56.client.comcast.net |
| Good work again Keanu. Front page hookup for my old school homie =] |
| #8 SnK-Arcbound[155341] |
| evrtwa1-ar11-4.14.88.79.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| you should just take pictures of yourself in nude power-stances for some really great visuals :P |
| #9 [155342] |
| ip68-230-2-63.ph.ph.cox.net |
| hot damn! thank you much mark! |
| #10 Mark4[155343] |
| c-67-180-207-56.client.comcast.net |
| I know I haven't been as active lately, but when the hell did we get people like arcbound? j/k! Luv! |
| #11 sum guy[155347] |
| finn.yumaed.org |
| nice writing man |
| #12 SnK-Arcbound[155348] |
| evrtwa1-ar11-4.14.88.79.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| I've been around for afew years but not been posting. This is my BR account name too. I'm usually playing diablo2 under pimpmasterk hehe. Gimme a call if u wanna play. Try when I'm not grounded and after i have dinner :) |
| #13 SnK-Arcbound[155349] |
| evrtwa1-ar11-4.14.88.79.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Oh yeah i loved the badme br. It was bomb. I really liked the little movie. u guys should do more of them. |
| #14 Desert Demon[155350] |
| user-0ce2kbg.cable.mindspring.com |
| Hey Mark, when do we get to see your next report? :D |
| #15 Mark4[155351] |
| c-67-180-207-56.client.comcast.net |
| I need to find a game I'm inspired to report on. Or any game really =]. But I'm back baby, you'll see one soon enough. |
| #16 SnK-Arcbound[155352] |
| evrtwa1-ar11-4.14.88.79.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Lets see his last one was in late 03 so I'd say look for it in 2006. |
| #17 maareek[155353] |
| mblt-aa011.gtcom.net |
Mark, if you tell me when yours is coming out I'll put one out just before it to make yours look that much better. ;)
I guess I should read this, huh? I'll do it later, specifically after I read chapters 1-the one before this. But still <3! |
| #18 Dibbler[155382] |
| 213-84-180-234.adsl.xs4all.nl |
| Say, I heard battlereports.com is down. Is it up yet? |
#19  [155383] |
| d141-165-127.home.cgocable.net |
FINALLY read it!
This is good - almost very good - but I think you could incorporate some more detail about how the characters feel, about what's going on deep inside them. That said, your writing style is great and your dialogue is realistic. What you do write about your characters' feelings makes sense - I'd say an 8 right now.
GJ! |
| #20 [155385] |
| ip68-230-2-63.ph.ph.cox.net |
| oh daggy you're such a tease <3 |
| #21 SnK-Arcbound[155387] |
| evrtwa1-ar11-4.14.88.79.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Yeah but then he had to stab that hooker and we all know how that story ends :( |
| #22 Nihilo[155399] |
| CPE-24-27-139-121.neb.rr.com |
Good read. The entire thing could use a little fleshing out as far as the characterization and general detail goes, but I like where you're going with it.
I'm no rater, but I'd give it an 8 with potential for a 9.5. |
| #23 Brandy[155467] |
| c-24-1-84-176.client.comcast.net |
| HEY um... do you really want me to read all that??? its crazy long... |
| #24 [155490] |
| d141-165-127.home.cgocable.net |
| go watch a music video on mtv then |
| #25 wakiki[155495] |
| cable-68-117-183-96.mtv.al.charter.com |
Rofl Dag.
<3 Mehdi! |
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