| #1 OverTheUnder[158229] |
| 12-205-145-63.client.mchsi.com |
first!~~~
Hope this is bw>_< |
#2  [158230] |
| nr11-216-196-184-12.fuse.net |
Holy hell this is huge.
Like, enormous. Good god.
I'll read it when I have a spare hour or two. This is quite ambitious. |
| #3 Convider[158232] |
| HSE-Toronto-ppp304401.sympatico.ca |
I like it. Was hard to follow the game though, and the monotype font and basic images didn't help much either.
7 |
| #4 BeRzErKeR[158233] |
| 216.49.74.174 |
That was . . . big. It was kinda cool, but took too long to read, and Convider's right, font and pics didn't help much.
<7 |
| #5 dodopout[158235] |
| d199-126-42-193.abhsia.telus.net |
I liked it =....
the font was kinda harsh, but i liked the writing |
| #6 MidnightGladius[158236] |
| adsl-9-110-23.mia.bellsouth.net |
| That was awesome. The characterization was quite good, and the action was smooth all the way. Three things to improve on: font, background, and pictures. Other than that, good job. |
| #7 dustbiter[158237] |
| bbcache-16.singnet.com.sg |
| Sufficient length compared to some writing unnecessarily broken up into 6 brief parts. Short attention span isn't good. |
| #8 OverTheUnder[158238] |
| 12-205-145-63.client.mchsi.com |
its too short-_- Dude this is the longest bw report on one game i have ever seen o.o And the game wasnt even as long as some.
Good though:D
8 cause this is the first bw report in a long time |
| #9 Timid[158239] |
| cpe-24-30-184-75.socal.res.rr.com |
Just read it.
Very refreshing.
Excellent job |
| #10 maareek[158243] |
| mblt-ab009.gtcom.net |
| Pretty good, didn't take that long to read, either. I'd give it an 8 if I were a rater, but I'm not, so I won't. |
| #11 Lithium[158244] |
| pool-70-105-134-173.char.east.verizon.net |
| I honestly can't read this. The layout needs some major blind reducing features. This seems to be stark black with stark white, which in most books is a big no-no. Try using non complete blacks and whites. (i.e. R-1 B-1 G-1 and R-299 B-299 G-299). They are a lot easier on the eyes. Greys are also good. Also, you ought to make the frame with the ToC a lot smaller. It seems, at least on my resolution, to be a lot of empty space for 10 or so small lines. |
| #12 TM[158245] |
| 0-1pool160-231.nas17.dallas2.tx.us.da.qwest.net |
Not bad at all. I liked it a lot, a good read. A real game with fanfic writing. 8
And I like the link to the email :) |
| #13 des[158246] |
| user-0ce2kl3.cable.mindspring.com |
wut's 299?
do you mean 255?? |
| #14 Lithium[158247] |
| pool-141-153-49-249.char.east.verizon.net |
| Probably. I don't work with RGB color scales. Just trying to say that you want a small presence of each color and a not complete saturation depending on which extreme your headed for. |
| #15 SnK-Arcbound[158248] |
| pool-71-112-176-55.sttlwa.dsl-w.verizon.net |
| Before I read it, is the game between crappy players? Cause I don't want to read a long game with people making stupid mistakes. |
| #16 Iron Warrior[158250] |
| host69-184.pool8252.interbusiness.it |
I just finished reading. Writing could have been better. The end was kind of anticlimatical, but other than that great job.
7.5 |
| #17 RabidMurloc[158251] |
| ool-43516e69.dyn.optonline.net |
Allow me to put it in Dice's words. dot dot fricking dot. follwed by AWESOME! Very, very good. The mercs were good, but they never fought pro-toast. (Heartcutter, I honor you!) Hehe.
Very descriptive. The part where the dropship was retreating and one last dragoon shot blows it was cool. Also, I noticed a distinct lack of swear words. That's good in a fanfic. It was kind of fanfic-report hybrid. Like you dip a report and a fanfic in radioactive waste and put them together. So stop questioning the game and the players and crap and enjoy the story.
I can't figure out how to put stuff on fanfiction.net, so I'm hoping a WoW fic might be welcomed. |
| #18 Dice[158254] |
| nj-65-164-22-169.dyn.sprint-hsd.net |
| notice that the report writer seems to have left |
| #19 striz[158257] |
| CPE0007e95ea1fa-CM013050003852.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| not bad... didn't make it all the way through, but maybe sometime I'll pull it off. pretty good writing style, FREAKING long... |
| #20 Dice[158258] |
| nj-65-164-22-169.dyn.sprint-hsd.net |
| someone rate this thing already |
| #21 SnK-Arcbound[158259] |
| pool-71-112-161-104.sttlwa.dsl-w.verizon.net |
| Nice, though some flavor problems. Protoss don't have lips, dead zealots can't be revived as dragoons, but if thye are maimed or injured in battle, their consienceness can be transfered to the dragoon shell. Next time, introduce something that we didn't know about the races, make it more flavorful, make it yours. |
| #22 Raider[158260] |
| ip68-227-201-93.dc.dc.cox.net |
| argh black on white and no margins. I'll give this a try but in the future please try to make the report less painful to read. |
#23  [158265] |
| CPE000ea6388836-CM001371143574.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| I thought it was a good, entertaining report with horrid formatting. 7. |
| #24 Clay.Camel[158272] |
| 199.3.215.170 |
Great report, very well written.
As most everyone else posted, you'll need to work a bit on the formatting/presentation.
8+
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| #25 Micro[158275] |
| cache-rtc-aa01.proxy.aol.com |
| i agree with dag. |
| #26 NewbEye[158276] |
| dp-216-106-106-88.storm.ca |
Thanks for reading, folks. More people decided to tackle this than I'd have guessed.
Sincere apologies for the blinding contrast. By way of excuse, I can only offer that I'm so used to it that I just don't notice it. I shall trawl the web for more wisdom in this matter.
Arcbound, good catch with the lips thing. If nothing else, the report proves I'm a totally clueless about visuals. But I'm pretty sure that dead (literally) zealots can be brought back as goons -- there's Fenix, and also references to "mortally wounded" zealots. Sadly, I don't have enough guts to stray too far from Blizzard's SC gospel, because I hate inconsistencies, and who knows what'll be in the next SC-themed release.
And my loyal font complainers... You will never know how much I truly love you. You will see the glory of Courier, no matter how long your proselytisation takes me :D
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| #27 Dibbler[158298] |
| 213-84-180-234.adsl.xs4all.nl |
| I agree with Micro. |
| #28 dustbiter[158310] |
| bbcache-115.singnet.com.sg |
| I agree with Dibbler. |
| #29 Faloth[158406] |
| pia151-11.pioneernet.net |
| I agree with the general populous, that the format could have been better. Regardless, your writing style is excellent, better, at least for narrative/stories, then anyone else here, period. |
| #30 maareek[158407] |
| mblt-aa010.gtcom.net |
| FALOTH! sup |
| #31 Faloth[158410] |
| pia151-11.pioneernet.net |
| Hey Maar, good old BR.com keeping me company at my weekend job (boring, easy, boss reads random crap more than I do). Now just to install SC on this comp . . . ;) |
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